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Bonnie

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« on: April 21, 2005, 08:59:52 PM »
dont mind if I copy and paste from my forum lol I dont have time to retype everything  :P

The first pieces are excerpts from my book thats being published in fall... yay! Finally hehe Ive been waiting for awhile now... dont mind how choppy it is, it hadnt been touched by my editor when I posted it...  Oh by the way the parts of the book Im putting here may be a little gruesome to some...

Obsession © 2004  -- excerpt 1

Already dark, the evening was cool and blustery, Kathryn headed towards her car, which was parked in a lot just down the block. She always felt a little uneasy walking the distance to her car in the dark, there were very few streetlights to light her way and it wasn’t the best part of the City. Kathryn turned to look behind her feeling that she was being followed, but saw nothing, shaking her head she thought it must have just been her imagination. Then the feeling was back, she quickened her steps as the car park came into view, moving faster as she saw her car. Keys already in her hand, she opened the door, but stopped short as she saw a package on her front seat, not knowing what to do she leaned in to retrieve the package, it was large and heavy, putting it on the hood of the car she lifted the lid. Choking back the nausea she felt she gazed at the contents of the package, it looked like a cat, only all of its fur had been peeled cleanly off and its skull had been caved in. Horrified, she stepped back from the box, but her path was blocked by something, something big and warm against her back, a scream bubbled in her throat as she tried to find a way to escape.

Obsession © 2004  -- excerpt 2

Rising, he walks toward her, still aroused; he can smell the fear coming from her. Stepping behind her, he drags the pointed tip of the scissors across her throat, “Mmm, very sweet” he murmurs in her ear as he continues to massage his erection, he grabs a handful of her long red hair and roughly pulls her head back, very nearly causing her neck to snap, raising the scissors he begins to hack away brutally at her hair, coming dangerously close to cutting her scalp on several occasions. He walks around the chair to look at his handiwork.

“Much better” he mutters to himself as he unties her from the chair and drags her to the bathroom. “Bath yourself you filthy whore!” he yells shoving her roughly into the bathtub still blindfolded.

She shakes in fear as she bathes herself, knowing by the sounds of his heavy breathing that he was quickly coming to the point of no return. He is standing close, she can feel the heat coming off him, the sound of his zipper coming undone causes her to shake more, she knows what’s going to happen and attempts to prepare herself for it. Surprisingly she thought that knowing your going to die really wasn’t that bad, it was the wondering how that terrified her, moments later she knew.

He grabs a rope that he had brought into the bathroom and wraps it around her throat, pulling her partway out of the tub as he tightens it, she struggles fighting against the tightness that begins to crush her larynx, suddenly it loosens and she drops back into the tub grabbing her throat she gasps for air only to be submerged roughly under the water and held there. She struggles for only a moment more before allowing the darkness of death to take her. He stands over her lifeless body, watching it float in the tub at an awkward angle, now that he has appeased one need, he once again takes his erection in his hands and appeases his last need. Zipping up his pants he looks at the body in disgust and begins to formulate a plan for the quiet removal of the body from his home and eventual placement at its final resting place.
I love him, O yes I do,
He's for me, not for you,
And if by chance you take my place,
I'll take my fist and smash your face!

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« Reply #1 on: April 21, 2005, 09:01:22 PM »
Poetry... published 2004... Eternal Portaits Series (Anthology)


The Night

We stand side by side on a small bridge,
Just above a tinkling stream and the silver moon,
Holding hands and staring at the stars,
And you say:
As the moon and stars shine above, I promise to you my undying love.
And I say to you:
As long as roses bloom, my heart will allow no other room.
We look at each other and the love in our eyes shows,
And we say:
As long as we live our love will be take and give.
The stars shine, the moon glows, and the stream passes below,
We walk away hand in hand.


Copyright ©2004 D. Spooner



Thats it for now, more to come  :)
I love him, O yes I do,
He's for me, not for you,
And if by chance you take my place,
I'll take my fist and smash your face!

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« Reply #2 on: April 22, 2005, 01:01:40 PM »
Sick story...reminds me of a lot of fucked up things like The Black Dahlia murder and parts of the Soham murders.
Twisted but interesting. Like listening to Slayer.
It killed me when I saw that wet patch on her seat
It wasnt coca cola

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« Reply #3 on: April 22, 2005, 02:22:58 PM »
hehe thanks, twisted seems to be my forte... cant seem be bothered with the mushy lovey dovey crap, get enuf of that at home lol

And then entire book isnt like all that, just parts, theres sex, drugs, violence.... all the good stuff in there even a little rock n'roll at the beginning.

Slayer is one of my favorites tho ;)
I love him, O yes I do,
He's for me, not for you,
And if by chance you take my place,
I'll take my fist and smash your face!

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« Reply #4 on: April 22, 2005, 06:16:40 PM »
Quote from: "bucketsixx"
Sick story...reminds me of a lot of fucked up things like The Black Dahlia murder and parts of the Soham murders.
Twisted but interesting. Like listening to Slayer.


 :lolatthis:   :laughs2:  :laughs2:  :laughs2:  :laughs2:


I choked on my cereal.   BB I'll read your post when the mood is right  :kiss2:

b to the p

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« Reply #5 on: April 22, 2005, 07:24:34 PM »
netime ur up for it dear  :kiss2: definately not breakfast material... maybe more like pissed at the world or really ripped.

I will give you guys something a little less... ummm polite word coming to mind... nasty with the next post  ;)

now Im going shopping  :laughs2:
I love him, O yes I do,
He's for me, not for you,
And if by chance you take my place,
I'll take my fist and smash your face!

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« Reply #6 on: August 02, 2005, 07:32:01 PM »
just sick

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« Reply #7 on: January 21, 2006, 12:24:31 AM »
Amazing writings BB!! I really like them!!!! Powerful and Intense!!!
The peom is very beautiful also! Keep up the great work and please, continue to share your work with us. ;)
And of better days
from this town, we'd escape.
If we holler loud and make our way
we'd all live 'One Big Holiday'.

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« Reply #8 on: January 21, 2006, 01:06:23 AM »
ty hon.... I promise something within the next week ;)
I love him, O yes I do,
He's for me, not for you,
And if by chance you take my place,
I'll take my fist and smash your face!

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« Reply #9 on: January 21, 2006, 01:25:04 AM »
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ty hon.... I promise something within the next week ;)


Fantastic! ;)
And of better days
from this town, we'd escape.
If we holler loud and make our way
we'd all live 'One Big Holiday'.

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« Reply #10 on: January 21, 2006, 04:23:46 PM »
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ty hon.... I promise something within the next week ;)


Fantastic! ;)


but dont hold it against me if it takes a little longer.... life is as life is ya know
I love him, O yes I do,
He's for me, not for you,
And if by chance you take my place,
I'll take my fist and smash your face!

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« Reply #11 on: May 26, 2006, 10:02:28 PM »
ok so its been awhile, and this hasnt seen an edit from me yet, but I wrote it yesterday after having my heart ripped out repeatedly over the last 2 days...

I’m broken hearted and lost
Battered and blue
Some where over the years
We lost you

Once you were a happy child
Full of smiles and love
Over time you’ve changed and
Now push has come to shove
No more kid glove

I remember you in those days
And how I always wanted to keep you
Now I can’t find the way
To the sky of blue
That will bring us through

Once you were a happy child
Full of smiles and love
Over time you’ve changed and
Now push has come to shove
No more kid glove

I stand in the door
Of the room that was yours
The bags I’ve had to pack
Sitting on the floor
I would give anything to take it all back

Just know that you are loved
Although it may seem untrue
Adieu
My girl, adieu
I love him, O yes I do,
He's for me, not for you,
And if by chance you take my place,
I'll take my fist and smash your face!

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« Reply #12 on: May 26, 2006, 11:23:46 PM »
Wooowwwww BB, I had never seen this thread before.


The excerpts form your story;; fantastic. It's almost like somehting I would read, or even write myself. Keep it up.


And both of your poems were very very good.

Soory to hear you're having a rough time lately....


much love,

Nikole

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« Reply #13 on: May 27, 2006, 02:53:16 PM »
thanks lottaluv, those are excerpts from my book... Im so very pleased about how well it turned out...  Im working on a blue print for another now :)  Hopefully its as well excepted as the last *fingers crossed*

its life ya know, sometimes there are people you love that you just cant help no matter how much it hurts you.  The hard part of the rough times are over, now its the adjustment stage... just getting used to the change... the kids are my primary concern right now they are destroyed


>hugz< thanks for being so kind sweety
I love him, O yes I do,
He's for me, not for you,
And if by chance you take my place,
I'll take my fist and smash your face!

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« Reply #14 on: May 27, 2006, 04:32:17 PM »
Kinda gruesome, but coming from a Lovecraft fan that can only be a good thing.