Lyrics I wrote - "Another Day"... Opinions?

[aussie_GNR92]

Not 100% sure about it just yet. What do you guys think? What needs work? What's good? Is it complete and utter shite? Just say what you think, be as blunt as you want.

Another Day
(Working Title)
 
VerseSweet talkin' parasites hunting for the kill
Drag me into conversations I can never fill
Try to make me what I should be, but that aint gonna fly
Wrap me in your spiders web, beat me 'til I die
 
Chorus
So you'll just buy into my lines
Remain blinded by the lies
It's just another day in the life
 
You do your best to help them out
You strain, you struggle, scream n’ shout
Then they sneak out back and fuck your wife

But, it's just another day in the life
 
Verse
Can't get outta this grave I dug, so I guess you'll bury me deep
Six feet under, safe and sound, away from all the sheep
High and low I'll search for comfort, that can never be found
Keep goin' at it, one more bad habit, as the cycle spins 'round n round
 
Chorus
So you'll just buy into my lines
Remain blinded by the lies
It's just another day in the life

You do your best to help them out
You strain, you struggle, scream n' shout
Then they sneak out back and fuck your wife
 
Yeah, it's just another day in the life

Bridge
Blind eye, gettin' high
Makin out I'm to blame
Standing still, you patronize
As I play your game
 
One night only, a sight for the lonely
Is all you're asked to give
Got this monkey on my back
You give it reason to live
 
Got this monkey on my back
You give it reason to live
 
Get this monkey off my back
Why must you make it live?
 
Chorus
So you'll just buy into my lines
Remain blinded by the lies
It's just another day in the life
 
You do your best to help them out
You strain, you struggle, scream n shout
Then they sneak out back and they fuck your wife

Oh, it's just another day in the life
 
Another day in the life
 
Another day in the life

One more fuckin' day in this life

[HajrudinPranjga]

and then they fuck your wife

[rds.06]

I find it really hard to get lyrics without hearing them being sang.

But I really like this song 

I really like to first 2 lines, the first line is great.

Can't get outta this grave I dug, so I guess you'll bury me deep
Six feet under, safe and sound, away from all the sheep

I like the above part just not the word sheep, I get what you mean by sheep as in blind followers but when I read it, it just made me think of actual sheep and I can only imagine it sounding weird to sing the word sheep.

Can't get outta this grave I dug, so I guess you'll bury me deep
six foot under, safe and sound, away from all that's bleak

Can't get outta this grave I dug, so I guess you'll bury me deep
never to see the light of day, may I rest quietly here in peace

Can't get outta this grave I dug, so I guess you'll bury me deep
no emotion, no remorse, so I rest here black, but no peace

Sorry for messing around with your lyric, not sure if any of them work, im shit at this kind of stuff.

But overall really good lyrics, just dont ruin them by screaming so you cant here them 

 
 

[rds.06]

Also, I always like when the last chorus changes slightly from the rest, instead of them all being the same.

So, i'm going to mess with the last chorus a little 

So you'll just buy into my lines
Remain blinded by the lies
It's just another day in the life
 
You do your best to help them out
You now refuse to speak, I refuse to shout
Then they sneak out back and they fuck your wife

Oh, it's just another day in the life

[SilverRevolver]

  awesome song RECORD i wanna hear it