this part is good:
and burning lungs makes me think of when Icarus was flying so so high that he almost touches the sun, but i must be careful or my wax wings will melt just like his
I knew you'd get most of it, if not all. There are a few references in there, and that is one of them.
Though you've interpreted it differently than I would, but that is the beauty of literature. Everyone views it their own way.
I think it's only a matter of time. Icarus never wants his wings to melt, but they always will. He can't stop himself from flying so high, he was even warned =).