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lawlessblade

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writing songs...
« on: July 11, 2007, 09:58:42 PM »
iv recently started writing a few songs ( mainly because i can't sing or play any instrument unfortunatly)but not shown anybody so i thought id post 1 or 2 here and ask what people thought.

if you've got the time please leave a little comment thanx

Boy

With each ring of the phone my heart aches more
i long for an answer
wont someone please give me an answer?
for he's just a boy
all alone with the bitch and the bastard
the boy doesnt deserve this
cos thats all he is...a boy

As the phone stops ringing
my heart follows suit
my beating heart sets a trend for my racing steps
the ping of the elevator realerts my senses
the twin doors open
as i get closer to the boy all i hear is
beep beep beep beep beep beep beep
for christ sake he's just a boy

The boy lays there raped by machines
am i the only one who cares
apprently so
his "loved" ones are so wrapped up in there own mess
did they stop to consider the boys distress
course not cos to them its all about beating each other
i pleaded and begged
look at your boy

now the dust has settled
scores aswell
the boy has gone
the bastard to
one will return
i ask the bitch who
she looks me in the eye and says...

the boy...the boy

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Re: writing songs...
« Reply #1 on: July 11, 2007, 10:15:43 PM »
hmm..makes a good poem. Not sure how it'd work as a song though
It killed me when I saw that wet patch on her seat
It wasnt coca cola

lawlessblade

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Re: writing songs...
« Reply #2 on: July 11, 2007, 10:25:47 PM »
thats what did think actually