Author Topic: WHAT DO YOU THINK OF THIS SONG? (Read 2112 times)

Locomotive16 · « **on:** November 06, 2006, 01:16:25 AM »

Come in come right in
dont hesitate come right in
im the one with your wildest dreams
im the one who can set you free

Hello city speaking
i wont rip you off
come right in

All ill do is play you n toy with you you
until your paranoid bipolar n crazy
Come to me a person come out a
paranoid andorid Aw!,

ill take you through a world youve never ben
ill break you into peace until your but a sin
ill help you admit nobody dies a virgin because life screws all and your first in line honey yea!

Breakdown your on your knees
your sinking in my seas

Aw..!

Gagarin · « **Reply #1 on:** November 06, 2006, 01:18:56 AM »

Quote from: "Locomotive16"

Come in come right in
dont hesitate come right in
im the one with your wildest dreams
im the one who can set you free

Hello city speaking
i wont rip you off
come right in

All ill do is play you n toy with you you
until your paranoid bipolar n crazy
Come to me a person come out a
paranoid andorid Aw!,

ill take you through a world youve never ben
ill break you into peace until your but a sin
ill help you admit nobody dies a virgin because life screws all and your first in line honey yea!

Breakdown your on your knees
your sinking in my seas

Aw..!

Uhmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
if there was music, otherwise it may or may not just be bad/good poetry.

Locomotive16 · « **Reply #2 on:** November 06, 2006, 01:20:08 AM »

Yea i know its hard with just words, but do u think the words r good?

Locomotive16 · « **Reply #3 on:** November 06, 2006, 01:44:45 AM »

cmon a reply of thoughts pleasE?

dykwtfya · « **Reply #4 on:** November 06, 2006, 01:46:17 AM »

looks good to me. go to he garden section tho

axTHAL · « **Reply #5 on:** November 06, 2006, 01:53:02 AM »

decent nothing special kinda just looks like you threw that toghter

Locomotive16 · « **Reply #6 on:** November 06, 2006, 01:53:09 AM »

thx appreciate ur comment man

axTHAL · « **Reply #7 on:** November 06, 2006, 01:54:13 AM »

o and dont use lyrics like paranoid android and set you free for it feels to me that u just got them from other songs but its a good start

Locomotive16 · « **Reply #8 on:** November 06, 2006, 01:56:39 AM »

Those arent from other songs man
Paranoid andriod is a term and if we should sya that then no one would be able to use the english vocab to write a song because all the words r gone,using words that u see in other songs does not mean u copied form them a line would but not a well knmown term.

feconroses · « **Reply #9 on:** November 06, 2006, 01:58:13 AM »

unoriginal to me

axTHAL · « **Reply #10 on:** November 06, 2006, 02:01:50 AM »

Quote from: "Locomotive16"

Those arent from other songs man
Paranoid andriod is a term and if we should sya that then no one would be able to use the english vocab to write a song because all the words r gone,using words that u see in other songs does not mean u copied form them a line would but not a well knmown term.

just has that vibe idk id have to hear the music n melody of the vocals to tell you for sure

Locomotive16 · « **Reply #11 on:** November 06, 2006, 02:10:21 AM »

This is sumthin i writ during english class anyways,kinda jus hit me
for sumthing wiritten within 20 mins its decent,

Locomotive16 · « **Reply #12 on:** November 06, 2006, 02:55:08 PM »

Any more comments?

slashof · « **Reply #13 on:** November 06, 2006, 02:56:32 PM »

WTF!!!

HOW IS THIS GUNS N ROSES 2006 NEWS?????

Locomotive16 · « **Reply #14 on:** November 06, 2006, 02:59:31 PM »

i dont care not really an issue so mind ur business